Our boat inverted unknowingly, we were thrown into the water, darkness came before my eyes and not a single word uttered.
Husband tried to save me, but the water was pulling me away. I held my breath, so that water from the nose and mouth would not get into my stomach, even tried to paddle.
I tried desperately to get across the water,but I started to go under the barge that was anchored. My heart sank, when I saw the end near. Even in that situation, my eyes got wet in the water and I closed my eyes.
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What a way to go. In 99 words you show the desperation and fight for life and then the giving up.
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Thank you so much ❣️
…..after trying hard I left it in God’s hands….. normally everyone does the same thing.
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The tension you wrote into this story feels so real, including the moment she lets go.
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Thank you so much ❣️
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Thanks🥀
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A lot of power in these 99 tragic words and the reader can feel the narrator giving up at the end.
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I have put myself in that situation and imagined it……. thank you for appreciation!
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Your story keeps me on the edge of my seat, but I want it to go on, give a twist at the end. I don’t want you to just give up.
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Ok, I understood. Thank you so much for your good advise❣️
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