
A good man died and went to heaven. The door to heaven was closed and two clocks hung on the door wall. One was showing the time on earth and the other was showing the time in heaven.
As soon as he reached the gates of heaven, he was welcomed by God’s clerk then God’s clerk warned him not to get any stuff inside. The good man said, ‘I didn’t get anything with me.’
God’s clerk said, ‘Please take the weight off your head.’ The good man asked, ‘What weight and how to lower it?
The clerk of God answered, ‘Give up all your hopes and aspirations.If you fall in love with someone, get rid of it. Lighten your mind, then the door of heaven will open for you.’
Clerk continued, ‘I want to read your whole life before God, then God will decide what to do with you, whether to send you to heaven or again to the same hell by giving rebirth.
A busy schedule
brought a sudden stop to life
severe heart attack
valuable life wasted
the end of one valentine
Β©οΈ Jane Aguiar
Written in response to: https://wordcraftpoetry.com/2022/02/15/tankatuesday-weekly-poetry-challenge-no-261-2-15-22-photoprompt/
Thank you for reading.
Stay Blessed! π
Love this!
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Thank you!
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Very interesting idea Jane. I hope when I die, I leave all my worries, my desires behind.
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Of course, nothing is allowed. Glad you liked this tankaprose. Thank you, dear Sadje!π
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My pleasure.
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Wow! That is powerful, Jane. Well done! β€
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So glad you liked this tankaprose. Thank you so much, dear Colleen! π₯°β€οΈ
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You’re most welcome Jane. β€
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It’s my pleasure, dear Colleen! β€οΈ
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run like hell
do tell
story of a life
man to wife
it is no more
cos the second
mate
stayed
way more
late!
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Wow! you did one nice poem, dear John.β€οΈ
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ty. that s the fun. a sorta sideways collabaration.
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Yeah! You are too good in collaboration. Reallyππ»
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What a wonderful story. I’m left a bit on pins and needles, did the man finally enter? hah π πΌπΌβ Such a compelling story and memorable ending, dear. ππππ
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Glad you liked this tankaprose, dear Lamittan.Thank you so much!ππ·
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Indeed! You’re much welcome, Jane. ππ
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It’s my pleasure, dear!π·
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Wow! What gorgeous prose, and poetry, dear Jane. Profound beauty. I love it! β€οΈ
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I’m so glad you liked the tankaprose. Thanks a lot, dear Jeff!πΊπ·
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Youβre welcome, dear Jane. Always. I loved it. πΉπΊβ€οΈ
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It’s my pleasure, dear Jeff!π
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It gives a whole new meaning to hell on Earth! Lol! Great tankaprose, Jane! π
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In fact, I think this earth is hell and God’s heaven should be heaven. That’s why we write after someone dies, ‘Lord, I’m coming home’ (I think so) Thank you so much, dear Yvette!π
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lovely take on this Jane. Heartfelt delivery! π
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Glad to know you liked this tankaprose. Thanks, dear Cindy!π
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I so did!!πππ
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Very deep and beautiful how you conveyed through prose and poetry – the simple and profound truths of life.
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Dear Pragalbha, Thank you for echoing and appreciating my writing!π
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You are very welcome, my pleasure truly π
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Wowed. Well done. π
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Thanks, dear Selma! π
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Wonderful take, Jane! Loved it!
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Thank you so much, dear Shruthi!
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Youβre welcome!
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Wonderful message. I love your response to the prompt, Jane ππ
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Glad you liked this Tankaprose. Thanks, dear Harmony ππ
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I really love the concept of this one dear Jane and it holds a wonderful message for all. π
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Thanks for the appreciation, dear Daphny!π
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Always a pleasure dear β€οΈ
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Beautiful thoughts and words, Jane! π
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Thank you so much, dear Mike! π
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Thank you so much, dear Colleen! π₯°
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Wonderful story, love it.
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Thank you so much, dear Anita!
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If only we slowed down and saw life in all its glory π
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Thank you for echoing with me, dear Parikhit!π
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Deep
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Thank you!
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You’re welcome
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My pleasure. π
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Thanks for your text. I think the clocks on the gate have a deeper meaning and the earth clock works faster because we can’t notice the value of the time on the earth. We always going on in the pursuit of themso time is running faster than we feel
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Maybe so. No one knows about heaven or hell. Thank you for sharing your thoughts!
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Thank you for sharing π
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